I'm Sorry

Okay, this is my very first Critique, so don't blame me if I totally and epically fail on this. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a…" width="19" height="19" alt="" title="Sweating a little..." />

First off, I have to say, that when I read the first two to three lines, I instantly connected with this poem. Everything about the meaning of this most anybody can relate to, which is a good way to interact with your readers. Secondly, the juxtapositions of the diction of the phrase "I'm sorry" and the negative counterparts gives the overall piece an ironic tone, which helps let the readers get the feeling that the speaker really isn't all that sorry to have those charactaristics and atributes. Aside from the long list of apologies, I feel that the last line-"Fell better now"-was the real in-your-face, "punch" line. It was, you might say, the whip cream that compleates the pie. Overall, =xDemonxAkumax did a really good job on this piece [of pie]. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)" />

Alright, now that my little AP English analysis is over(sorry for all the big words <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a…" width="19" height="19" alt="" title="Sweating a little..." />), I'm going to go into why I gave this poem the ratings that I did.

Vision: (5 stars)
I gave the vision part five stars for one simple reason. When I think of a "vision", I think of being able to connect with the artist/author and "see"-usually the deeper meaning-what they mean and wanted the viewers to see.
When I read the poem, I could actually mentally see the speaker, or rather, I could imagine myself in the speaker's position. Overall, the imagery in the poem may not have been super descriptive, but nevertheless, the "vision" I recieved was clear enough to be able to give this section 5 stars.

Originality: (4 stars)
I didn't give this one a five for the reason that there are many poems with a repetative beginning; however, I decided to give it a four because of the last line.

Technique: (4 stars)
Again, I gave this one a four because of almost the same reason as Originality. The repetative start doesn't technically srtike up a unique style. Yet again, I gave it a four rather than anything less than that because of the last line.

Impact: (5 stars)
This actually deserves something more than a five, but five is as high as the rating scale can go, so I'm just going to have to compensate. This poem has a MAJOR impact, and I'm sure everyone that reads this will agree with me. The subject is extreamly powerfull...I've nothing more to say.

Overall, I want to say that Akuma did a really nice job with this poem, and that I-and possible thousands of others-can really connect to it. Thus, I want to thank Akuma-chan for writing this and posting it, because I think it helps to send out the message that nobody is perfect, everyone has flaws that they might not be able to fix, and that people need to learn to accept people for who they are, rather than crticize them for how they act or what they do.